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谁能帮我看看这篇英语作文的语法这些错没有？谢了

There are three people in my family, my father, my mother and me. My name is Ye Dan, I am 21 years old today, now in a school, I like surfing the Internet and shopping. My father in a working station, he is 49 years old this year, he likes to read novels online. My mother is a company x27s accounting, she is 46 years old this year, her work very tired, but she insisted, she liked watching movies on the Internet, she always take care of we are one family life. I love my mom and Dad, because their daily hard work is for me, so I want to be a good child,

第三句 now in a school 语意不准确，不知你现在仍在校学习，还是你现在身在一所学校里。第四句 my father 后面缺谓语 works 或系动词 is，并且不知 working station 是指什么。my mother 不是 accounting 而应该是 accountant，后面 her work very tired 没有谓语，且 tired 语态错误，工作很累人是主动语态，变成形容词应该是 tiring，而人很累是被动语态，要用 tired。此后的两句都用过去时态不对，因为整段话都是说现在发生的事儿，忽然谈起过去“坚持工作”和“喜欢电影”，那就意味着现在不再这样了。因此错。she always take care of 后面必须跟名词性结构，而 we are one family 是个句子，所以错，而且 we are one family life，逻辑错误，因为我们拥有 life，但我们本身并不是 life。另外，英语中凡是独立的句子后面一定要用句号，不能一逗到底。以下是修改后的：
My family has three members, my father, my mother and me. My name is Ye Dan and I am 21 years old being a college student at the moment. I like surfing the internet and shopping. My father works in a train station. He is 49 years of age. He likes to read novels online. My mother is a corporate accountant. She is 46 this year. Her job is very tiring but she sticks on it and works hard. She likes watching movies on the internet and always takes care of my father and me. I love my mom and dad because I know all thier hard working is for me. So I want to be their good child.

There are three people in my family, my father, my mother and me.
people是中国教育的悲哀用法标准应该用person people inportant这种咱们的常用词鬼佬基本不用

My name is Ye Dan, I am 21 years old today, now in a school, I like surfing the Internet and shopping.
today是什么意思？今天你生日？如果只是表示“现在21” 那就直接“I'm 21 years old” in a school 没这种说法，不要直译“在学校里”，用studying now或者 I'm a student 比较好

My father in a working station, he is 49 years old this year, he likes to read novels online.
同样地问题 in a working station 换一下说法，而且这个本来就没有谓语语法也是错的。 this year 去掉理由同上

My mother is a company 's accounting, she is 46 years old this year, her work very tired, but she insisted, she liked watching movies on the Internet, she always take care of we are one family life.
My mother is an accountant. this year去掉。 her work very tired？这是“她的工作很累”？标准的中国式英语啊~~~ although the work is tired, she insist. —— 这个一般现在时，过去时那表示她以前坚持，现在退休了？后面同样为什么突然换成过去时了， she likes 就好
she always take care of we are one family life. 不懂完全不懂 she always take care of us 你是说这个么？

I love my mom and Dad, because their daily hard work is for me, so I want to be a good child.
their daily hard work is for me这个同上完全没有这种说法 because they work hard for my better life. 最后，你之前已经说了自己是21岁了 good child 这个说法....... 一般14岁以上就不用小孩来称呼了

There are three people in my family, my father, my mother and I. My name is Ye Dan. I am 21 years old today, now in a school, I like surfing the Internet and shopping. My father is in a working station. He is 49 years old this year. He likes reading novels online. My mother is a company accountant. She is 46 years old this year. Her work is very tiring, but she insists to continue. She likes watching movies on the Internet. She always takes care of our whole family. I love my Mum and Dad, because they work very hard every day for me. I want to be a good child.

There are three people in my family, my father, my mother and me. My name is Ye Dan, I am 21 years old,and I am a student.I like shopping and surfing the Internet.My father is 49 years old,and he is in a working station. He likes to read novels online.My mother is 46 years old.She is a accountant in a company,and her work is very tiring, but she insists. She likes watching movies online.She always takes care of our whole family. I love my Mum and Dad,what they work hard daily is for me,so I want to be a good child.

请大家帮我看看英语作文的错误并指出改正，谢谢

The impact of the internet on the way people communicate The picture is about a father and a mother writing a letter for their son who addicted to the screen. From this picture we can find the impact of the internet on the way people communicate. Maybe you will think it is unthinkable ,because their son who is just in the upstairs. But now with online chat is developing ,it will be a nomol thing. Why more and more people like use online chat instead face-to-face contact? I think it is easy to explain it . On the one hand , online chat is more convenient than face-to-face contact. Our phone and computer both have a chat tool. You can do it everywhere and any time if you want. On the other hand , the online chat is a modern thing .So young people think online chat is cool . In my opion , I do not think the electronic communication can replace face-to-face contact. Because online chat can not perfect show people real idea like someone who is express his love.

write
a
letter
to
sb.
for要改成to
who
is
addicted
to
the
internet.
或者who
has
internet
addiction.(who引导的是一个句子，要有动词)，还是说其实画面应该是e-mail啊，信和邮件还是有点不一样的。e-mail更加明确。如果是邮件的话。
unreasonable，不合理的，代替unthinkable，会好点吧。
upstairs已经是副词了，不需要再加in这个介词了。
But
as
chatting
online
becomes
more
and
more
popular,
it
is
becoming
a
normal
thing.
Why
do....，疑问句，在疑问词后面放动词
instead
of
contacting
to
each
other
face
to
face
I
think
开头的句子没有必要。其实英语里面比较少用设问的形式的。可以说There
are
reasons
why
people...
any
time
any
where/whenever
wherever
possible。不限时间和地点主要是指网络使得空间距离感减小吧。With
the
help
of
internet
we
can
chat
with
people
who
are
maybe
far
away
or
even
strangers,
that
means
we
can
get
to
know
people
from
different
cultures
through
internet.
People
could
feel
and
know
better
when
people
contact
each
other
face
to
face,
so
communication
would
be
more
efficient.
Besides
peole
can
touch
each
other,
which
is
very
important
in
communication.

大家帮忙看一下我这个英语作文哪里错了啊

错误一大堆，功底不扎实。满分25分，最多得12分。

Some students study too late, so they don't eat breakfast so that sleep more time. And some parents are too busy, so they have no time to take after their kids. So they pass some money for their kid to eat breakfast. But many boys don't eat breakfast, they use the money for games. And some girls want keep thin so don't eat breakfast.

If students don't eat breakfast, they will asleep at the class, don't like study and their grades will dropped. Their's body will be more worse.

I think students have to eat breakfast.

so that 后接从句，sleep缺少主语；

“take after sb 像某人长得像某人”。照顾可以说take care of... 或look after...；

pass 是传递的意思，不如用give，与to搭配，不是for；

“But many boys don't eat breakfast, they use the money for games.”这句由两个分句构，但没有连词连接，不严谨！

want 和keep之间漏了一个to；

so后面缺少主语，变成了祈使句；

asleep是表语形容词，缺少谓语动词；

“成绩下降”，will后怎么能用动词过去式？

their就是“他们的”，'s 多余；

worse已经是比较级，more 多余。

最后一段，草草结尾，提了一条没有参考价值的“建议”，啥问题都解决不了。

点评：全篇没有“亮点”，除了最后一句，没有一个正确的句子！英文书写不规范，特别是“y，g, f”这三个字母，位置偏高，看着很别扭。

These days, eating breakfast is becoming a big problem for teenagers. A survey shows that about 40% of the teenagers have a bad habit of not having breakfast.

The reasons for not having breakfast vary from person to person. Some students stay up late to study and they prefer to skip breakfast so as to sleep a few minutes more. Some parents are too busy to take care of their children. Instead of preparing breakfast, they often give money to their kids for breakfast. But some boys spend the money on games while some girls don't eat breakfast just to keep thin.

The bad habit of not having breakfast may have some bad effects in the long run. Firstly, the students are more likely to feel sleepy at class and become uninterested in study, which leads to a grade declining. Secondly, it also results in a worsening health of the kids.

Now that we know the importance of having breakfast every day, we should try hard to deal with the problem. As a says goes: early to bed and early to rise makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise. It's wiser to get up early to study than staying up late. Once we have a habit of getting up early, we'll have plenty of time both for breakfast and for study. Besides, those parents who are too busy to cook breakfast can buy some healthy food for their kids before leaving for work.

[参考译文]

现在，吃早餐正成为青少年的一个大问题。一项调查显示，大约40%的青少年有不吃早餐的坏习惯。

不吃早餐的原因因人而异。一些学生熬夜学习，他们宁愿不吃早餐，以便多睡几分钟。有些父母太忙，不能照顾他们的孩子。他们经常给孩子们钱吃早餐，而不是准备早餐。但是一些男孩把钱花在游戏上，而一些女孩不吃早餐只是为了保持苗条。

不吃早餐的坏习惯从长远来看可能会有一些不好的影响。首先，学生在课堂上更容易感到困倦，对学习不感兴趣，导致成绩下降。其次，它也会导致孩子们的健康状况恶化。

既然我们知道每天吃早餐的重要性，我们应该努力解决这个问题。俗话说:早睡早起使人健康、富有和聪明。早起学习比熬夜更明智。一旦我们养成早起的习惯，我们就有足够的时间吃早餐和学习。此外，那些太忙而没空做早餐的父母可以在上班前给孩子买一些健康的食物。

这是你的原文：(经过仔细辨认后才打出来的）
Some students study too late, so they don't eat breakfast so they sleep more time. And some parents are too busy, so they have no time to take after their kids. So they pass some money for their kid to eat breakfast. But many boys don't eat breakfast, they use the money for games. And some girls want keep this so don't eat breakfast.
If students don't eat breakfast, they will sleep at the class, don't like study and their grades will dropped. Their's body will be more worse.
I think students have to eat breakfast.
评价：
第一、可以知道你要表达的内容可以；
第二、书法不是很好，不能给阅卷人产生好的印象（这在高考或中考中，很重要，阅卷人的第一印象就是书法。）（希望加强书法练习）；
第三、文中反复出现so....（出现四次），英语作文最忌讳的是同一结构反复出现，要避免；
第四、出现明显错误（their's)(their已经是“他们的”的意思了），考试中，如果出现明显的语法错误，失分最多！
如果打分的话，你的这篇文章的分数在8-10分之间。
建议：
1、加强书法训练；
2、多背一些现成的短文，多记一些句型，充实自己的写作；
预测：你的英语已经有一定的功底，如果再努力一下，会进步很快的。

请英语高手帮忙找出这篇英语作文的错误

文章如下：rn Janex27s next week plansrn Jane makes a plan for next week.On Sunday,she is going to her unclex27s house and visiting her uncle. Itx27s very interesting.rn On Monday,she is finishing her science report.Itx27s very successful,although itx27s hard .Jane is thinking happy.rn On Tuesday,shi is going to the dentistx27s,because she is having a toothache ,she is feeling great dael of pain.rn On Wednesday,she is having a piano lesson from 18:00 to 20:00.rnJane loves piano lesson.rn On Thursday,she is studying for a maths test.And on Friday,Jane is going to the movies with Lily in the evening.Itx27s interesting.rn On Satureday,Jane is playing tennis with her friends,they are having a good time .rn Here are Janex27s next week plans,they are very interesting.rn初二的。总体不太难，关键是时态什么的。拜托了，找的全的加悬赏~！

Jane's next week(’s) plans
Jane makes a plan for next week.On Sunday,she (will be) going to her uncle's house and visiting her uncle. It's (will be)very interesting.
On Monday,she is finishing(will finish “finish不可以这样用”) her science report.It's(will be) very successful,(al)though it's hard .Jane is thinking happ(ily).
On Tuesday,shi(e) (will be)is going to the dentist's,because she is having (has) a toothache ,she feel great dael(dealing) of pain.
On Wednesday,she is(will be) having a piano lesson from 18:00 to 20:00.
Jane loves piano lesson.
On Thursday,she (will be)is studying for a maths test.And on Friday,Jane is(will be) going to the movies with Lily in the evening.It's (will be )interesting.
On Satureday,Jane is(will be) playing tennis with her friends,they are having(will have) a good time .
Here are Jane's next week plans,they are very interesting.
主要是时态问题，是不是老师最近讲将来进行时呢~~

Jane's next week plans
Jane makes a plan for next week.On Sunday,she is going to her uncle's house and visiting her uncle. It's very interesting.
On Monday,she is finishing her science report.It's very successful,although it's hard .Jane is thinking happy.
On Tuesday,shi is going to the dentist's,because she is having a toothache ,she is feeling great dael of pain.
On Wednesday,she is having a piano lesson from 18:00 to 20:00.
Jane loves piano lesson.
On Thursday,she is studying for a maths test.And on Friday,Jane is going to the movies with Lily in the evening.It's interesting.
On Satureday,Jane is playing tennis with her friends,they are having a good time .
Here are Jane's next week plans,they are very interesting.
将来时态，因为开头说是在下一个周

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