我这样写英语作文难道有什么问题吗

还不错吧，如果内容可以具体地说多点为什么你喜欢中国，为什么觉得是lovely就更好了。

（个人见解）另外还有一些比较明显的问题之处：

“Now they are building it as International Tourism Island.”
- building（建设）可以改为developing（发展
- as 之后加个 an 会好一点

“At Spring Festival, people usually eat rice balls in the south and Jiaozi in the north.”
- 饺子的英文是dumpling，不是jiaozi

“By the way, we also watch the moon, because the moon is big and bright on that day . Meanwhile, old people tell their grandchildren some stories about the moon.”
- 用不着by the way，直接we also 就行了
- watch the moon 不太对，watch是看，我们不是看月亮，是观赏月亮，所以可以说view and admire the moon.
- because 后面可以加个we think
- big and bright可以改成biggest and brightest
- old people tell 可以改成old people will tell

最后那里：
“This is my home ——China. I like it very much . I think , be more familier with China , people all over the world will like China more and more .”
- like可以改为love，跟你的题目相呼应
- 从I think开始有点不对
可以改为I think when China becomes more familiar to the world, people all over the world will begin to like China more and more.

不错，但有的语法好像有点问题

第二行第九个单词错了，不应该用复数，一位中国只有一个

Good morning, my friends. The topic of my speech is ‘China, my lovely home’.
China is one of the biggest and the oldest countries in the world, it has vast lands and amazing sights.
There are a lot of scenic spots and historical sites, such as the Great Wall, the Palace Museum, Changjiang River and so on. They are all very fabulous. Changjiang River is sixty-three hundreds kilometres long, the third-longest river in the world, which is thought as one of the mother rivers in China. It’s the main waterway for China, so important to us that the places along it are known as ‘Land of Rice and Fish’. This is the most fertile region in China with the richest cities and villages. Among all the new developed scenes, I like Hainan Island the most, because it has long summer and no winter, fifty percent of the city are covered by forests. People like going there for winter holidays. Now they are building it as a International Tourism Island.
To talk about the beautiful nature, we cannot forget our good friends—animals. The most famous one is the nation’s treasure, panda. Pandas have white and black fur. They look so lovely and usually make us a belly laugh .When you see them you can get happy soon . Another animal we all like is the South China tigers. They are also very rare. Pandas and South China tigers are both among the first class national protected animals.
Apart from animals, China also has a lot of specialities, especially food. For all Chinese festivals, we celebrate with special kind of food. At Spring Festival, people usually eat rice balls in the South and dumplings in the North. At Mid-Autumn Festival , we often eat moon cakes. By the way, we also view and admire the moon, because the moon is big and bright on that day . Meanwhile, old people tell their grandchildren some stories about the moon. Now Chinese food is not only loved by Chinese, but also many foreign people. It breaks the ice between China and western countries.
This is my home ——China. I like it very much . I think , be more familier with China , people all over the world will like China more and more .

Good composition!
Some tips:
1. The name of my speech ---The title of my speech
2. China has vast land and amazing sight.--sights
3. long, the the third-longest 多了一个the
4. so important to us that the places along it are known as ‘Land of Rice and Fish’. 句子结构错误，应为：it's so important to us
5. I like Hainan Island the best 去掉the，因为副词最高级不加the
6. by we Chinese,介词后用宾格，by us Chinese
7. familier with --familiar with

第一排very前加is，第四排let加s，第五排place加s，倒数第三排travel加s，倒数第五排language加s,这些小地方就不要出错了，还有写英语作文字是很重要的，排版也很重要，加油。

第二段加个sport比较好点travel is my favorite sport

第一行，maybe his dream后加is

now our country is catching up with the other areas of the world,so how can we communicate with foreigners if we don t study english.there are also many powerful countries ,such as the usa ,whose native language is english.besides, english is the main language in the world.
many people say why let us learn english but don t let foreiners learn chinese ,instead.many people in the world like learn one or more foreign language,and many of them learn chinese.mastering a language of a country can help to learn the knowledge of the country.
english is one of the most porpular languages in the world.there are about 300 000 000people who speak english,and it is the main working language in many international conferences.there are 60% radio stations and 70%posts which use english,and milions of books and magzines is wrote in english .
so we should learn english.
啊~~终于翻完了
该大写的地方我没大写 因为太麻烦
仅供学习参考

噢好多问题。很明显就是直接用中文翻译去英文的，基础不够好。
要修改的话，需要点时间。。

错误太多了，建议重写

可附上中文，知道上有很多英语达人可以帮你翻译。

晕，什么东东啊。什么水准。。。

问题比较多，建议你的老师把错误弄的少点，再让学生修改

整篇来说，有"we"又有"your"，可能会搞得你文章的读者混乱，你究竟是用第一人称还是第二人称？最好整篇文章保持一种人称，除非你是要特显出你和读者之间的不同。
everybody是作为单数的不定代词，所以我建议：
I
think
everybody
have
their
own
opinion
where
the
place
they
desired
to
go
or
visit.
-〉
I
think
everybody
has
his/her
own
opinion
about
what
place
he/she
desires
to
go
or
visit.（或者用where代替what
place)
We
do
many
things
and
go
to
almost
two
places
every
day:your
home
and
your
school.
建议改成：
We
have
many
activities
to
do
but
almost
go
between
two
places
only,
where
are
schools
and
homes.
Maybe
less
people
prefer
staying
in
a
place
because
they're
obsessed
with
computer
games
or
watching
televisions."less"用在有比较的时候吧。建议换成"a
few"或"some"或...
没有说运动的好处，在总结的时候却忽然说"it
is
better
to
do
some
sports
outside
than
..."太有跳跃性了吧？
插入建议：
Nevertheless,
sport
can
be
fun
and
helps
both
our
body
and
our
mind
to
relax,
so
it
makes
us
healthier.
"waste
your
time
relaxing"。relax不能算waste吧？建议改成：to
waste
our
life.改完后又好像说的严重了一点。
最后变成这样：
My
answer
is:
Of
course
not.Our
life
is
interesting,which
is
filled
with
a
myriad
of
different
things.We
live
in
this
big
city.We
have
many
activities
to
do
but
almost
go
between
two
places
only,
where
are
schools
and
homes.
It
seems
that
we
are
forced
by
the
situation
in
a
way,however,I
think
everybody
has
his/her
own
opinion
about
what
place
he/she
desires
to
go
or
visit.
Maybe
some
people
prefer
staying
in
a
place
because
they're
obsessed
with
computer
games
or
watching
televisions.Nevertheless,
sport
can
be
fun
and
helps
both
our
body
and
our
mind
to
relax,
so
it
makes
us
healthier.In
a
word,it
is
better
to
do
some
sports
outside
than
to
stay
in
the
same
place
continuously
to
waste
our
life.
PS：本人非英文老师或英语为母语的人，所以可能上面会有不少不适合的建议。
刚才看到你的题目：Do
you
perfer
staying
in
a
place
all
your
life?
你写的内容离题了吧？orz
题目问你会不会搬去其他地方之类的，你最后扯到运动来了。囧
你应该对比一下只住在一个地方的好坏和换个新地方居住的好坏，然后总结一下只住一个地方还是换个地方，换种生活方式好。

我暂时发现可两个错误。。最后一段，firstly应该改为frist 应为你的文章没有过去语态，所以把最后一排的过去式改为一般现在时，didnt改为dont

GOOD

coming true.