英语作文这两句话哪个是对的呢

1、第一句中的he改成his，应该用形容词形物主代词
2、第三句中的bron应该是born，应该是拼错了
3、he is living in changzhou now用一般现在时比较好。he lives in
changzhou now
4、第四第四句have改成has，用第三人称单数
5、眼睛用pair不合适，直接说small eyes就行了
6、one small mothe改成a small mouth（one的用法不是很合适，mouth拼错了）
7、第六句把he改成his，用形容词性物主代词
8、第七句把like改成likes，用三单形式。把play改成playing，like+动词ing
9、最后一句......不说原因了，我认为应该这么说“I like him because he studies very hard,I want to learn from him （本人认为like用在这里不合适，不过语法没错误就是了）

修改后全文如下：
his name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old. He was born in changzhou and he lives in changzhou now. He has small eyes a small mouth. He is very mild. his favourite subject is chinese.He likes playing computer games and playing the violin. I like him because he studies very hard,I want to learn from him

he(His) name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old. He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now. He have(has) a pair of small eyes (+and)one(a) small mothe(拼写错误mouth). He is very mild. he(His) favourite subject is chinese(C大写).He like(likes) play(playing) computer games and play(playing) the violin. I like him raeson(because that) is(删除) he(his) study is very good,twant(and I want) to leavn(learn) from him

你要注意动词的变位，正确的文章是：
His name is zha reng jie.He is twelve years old. He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now. He has a pair of small eyes and a small mouth. He is very mild. His favourite subject is Chinese.He likes playing computer games and playing the violin. I like him because that his study is very good, and I want to learn from him。

你好：

不是bron,是 born(出生）
第2行 不是He have 。是He has 。 "He has a pair of small eyes and a small mouth."

不是he favourite ，是his

He like play ，不对
应 在 like 后加s，应该是He likes playing computer games and playing the violin.

"Ilike him raeson is he study is very good,twant to leavn from him "
纯属 中式英语！！是错误的。
应该 是 I like him the reason is he studies well.

His（大些，物主代词）name is Zha Rengjie(大写).He is twelve years old. He was bron in Changzhou （地名大写）and he is living in Changzhou now. He has（第三人称单数） a pair of small eyes ，（分隔符）a（冠词） small mouth（嘴）. He is very mild. his（物主代词） favourite subject is Chinese（大写）.He likes（第三人称单数） playing（like后面加动名词）computer games and playing（同上） the violin. I like him for the raeson（原因是） is his（物主代词） study is very good,I want to learn（学习） from him

His name is Zha reng jie.He is twelve years old. He was bron in changzhou and he is living in changzhou now. He has a pair of small eyes and one small mothe. He is very mild. his favourite subject is chinese.He likes playing computer games and the violin. I like him because his study is very good,I want to learn from him .

这是在不违背你的原意的情况下改的，不过说实话，这文写的太“中式”了。

第一句 在like前加 to be，主要是你这个句子宾语后如果还要有东西的话需要一个动词连接，而后面用的是like，那么唯一可用的动词也就是 to be 了。歌词嘛，可以用口语也可以有非正确语法应为这属于非语言性艺术创作。
第二句，tired 和 too much pressure on me，看一下你也应该感觉有点不协调，不对称，因为前面tired 是形容词 而 pressure 是名词 怎么可能并列呢？你要是想继续用原话的话就在 too 前面另加一个felt，或者给你个同义词代替 “too much pressure on me” 这一串，很简单一个词就搞定："stressed"
希望对你有帮助，我幼时出国现在加拿大，对美式英式都有些了解，有什么其它问题我都乐意提供帮助。

还有，楼上说的什么feel后面只能用形容词什么的纯属扯淡，比如 sb felt something ，something 就是名词，怎么了？ 不懂就别瞎说，误人子弟！

第一，很多英文歌里面是不讲求英语语法的正误的，所以很多时候你会发现你将英文歌词应用到英语作文中往往会出现不少的问题，所以，英语歌词要慎用。并且，有些口语和书面语是不能混用的，至于你说want sb like this/that是否对，我觉得口语上并没有错，但是要运用到写作中的时候，我们通常是说want sb to do sth，你的英文翻译还比较弱，习惯按照中文的思维去翻译英文很多时候就会出项中西语言异议。
第二，你的第二个句子本身就是错误的。feel后一般应接形容词，应该是 feel tired and pressed, pressure本身是一个名词

pressure是名词吧。。应该前面不能有feel修饰。。我感觉啊。

第二句can't改成couldn't，第三句play改成played，第四句on
the
weekends后面加I，少了主语，第二段get改成got，倒数第二句改为问号，any重复了2遍，可改成any
other
reason，why后面缺主语，why
you
don't
play
sports
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补充：主要问题是时态不一致，
儿用现在时，一会儿用过去式
到底用哪个时态

可以，挺好的，不过我觉得an不用去掉。

...................there is "an" increasing use of robots in "the" contemporary society.............

其他还可以

划掉的an加上就好了...

是身份或者职业。比如，as a student

身份，不是人名

应该是身份吧，按照意思来说，也不应该是人名

有道一下，你就知道